Straight as Could Be

Not only this write, Nana...

I believe... that your every single write is straight from your heart, and I found even this write really poetic in a dramatic and sad way, I found it special for you described what you feel directly without complications or so, and I was truly feeling bad that I didn't read this until now, because it is one of those very few poems that leave you speechless, amazed and inspired. I too love the flow, simple and soft, the stanzas didn't break, at all. The title was VERY subtle, you know what I mean, I mean it wasthe title that caught my attention, and it left me wondering as well.
I agree with Temps, you should fix them ;)

What else would a metaphor
do, except for adding a color
for an art of emotions
previously crafted.
^^

I think you should put a question mark, in the end? and yeah, sometimes metaphors mar the pureness of our emotions, even if they are subtle or strong, but still the true feelings are more powerful, at least, in my humble opinion. :)

What else would a poem do,
except for showing that I am
not fine-no I am not happy.
To tell you simply how I feel deep inside.
^^
why putting the full stop after "happy"?
and add a space after "fine" :)

and here I must say you nailed a masterpiece! nd I'm going to continue reading all of your new poems for they seem magnificent like tis one :)

Really it's all just
one fact with endless
theories...and translators.
^^

my favorite part, Reno, my favorite part...

So here you go, straight
as it is, with less sweetening spells
(I am too lonesome).

^^^

the ending was such a perfect one for such a fantastic piece of art...endlessly wonderful, babe, keep writing!

God bless you! :)

Ah! When I saw the title I had a whole other thing in mind! But this poeem is bii--uuu-tiiii-f-ooolll.....
I love it how you always always have strong ending lines..
Kinda gives me an impact....

Here is a hug for you!!! *hugs*
Lovely write! Like always!

The word choice in this poem is EPIC Nana !!

I loved those lines so much ..

What else would a metaphor
do, except for adding a color
for an art of emotions
previously crafted.
^^
OMG!! amaaaaazing ..

The flow was great throughout the poem :)

5/5

I swear I've commented on this but it doesn't show I have. Woops!

If I could sum this up in one word, it would be suspenseful. You keep us leading to your final line with sadness and drama, and it kept me intrigued. I had to keep reading as I couldn't wait to figure out the real emotion behind the poem, that you had been leading to the whole time.

I think the best stanza out of them all would be the first, I love the idea of the metaphor being a color to aforementioned feelings.

I have nothing to critique here, this was a very personal insight into loneliness, dripping with sadness. Beautifully crafted. :)

Strive on, Dear and do, please,
Ask for help from that Highest place,
that Flame of Living Truth
living deeply within your very own
Heart of hearts..
Strive on Dear..
Your Longing Will
ultimately, bring you comforting,
and the strength needed to meet
the Future well as it comes toward you..
You Are Not Alone..
This I can promise..
Strive On...
'-)