1825 days later

Beautiful and I must say my brains hurting. I dont understand it almost at all, but it seemed somewhat sexual and at the same time very sad. The images that played in my head where like a custom sence in Phantom of the Opera of Erik, the Operas Ghost and a woman, but not Daae, embrace and then are forced to part. very confusing. anyways still loved it.

Wow.. I had to read it a a decade time before I had rapped my hands and clapped !!!
amazing write that is...

Oh Mel. Mel, Mel, Mellyboo. You and your poetry, beautiful and confusing, twisted images and verbs that just don't add up in my simple brain all the time, but nonetheless intriguing :)

I often read your poetry and come up with my own ideas rather than try to interpret what you're meaning here. Your symbolic stance is so strong that unless I'm of your caliber or your systematic wave, I just can't understand! lol

"I took my own hand,
one, twice. "

Should "one" be "once" ?

I love the title, it is what really brought me in. The most creative and intriguing part to me, that I've read over and over and over would be this:

"and so I buried it
before you, sand
smothering its ruby"

BEAUTIFUL and the meaning I took is much too personal to write here, but know it touched me deeply.

Beautiful poetry, Mel.

Oh Mel. Mel, Mel, Mellyboo. You and your poetry, beautiful and confusing, twisted images and verbs that just don't add up in my simple brain all the time, but nonetheless intriguing :)

I often read your poetry and come up with my own ideas rather than try to interpret what you're meaning here. Your symbolic stance is so strong that unless I'm of your caliber or your systematic wave, I just can't understand! lol

"I took my own hand,
one, twice. "

Should "one" be "once" ?

I love the title, it is what really brought me in. The most creative and intriguing part to me, that I've read over and over and over would be this:

"and so I buried it
before you, sand
smothering its ruby"

BEAUTIFUL and the meaning I took is much too personal to write here, but know it touched me deeply.

Beautiful poetry, Mel.

First of all...
What a title!!! Oh god...
It is eye catching...
Like really I'm like

What happend in 1825 days o.O

Dawn licking 'neath
my eyes, too swollen.
^
Here you are again,
With these raw images only you can paint in my mind..
I can't even...... How? Just how..
can someone even come up with something like that..
A.M.A.Z.I.N.G
I actually saw the sun
Pull a tongue out an lick someone's eyes..
God...

The sun she snacked
on feeble lashes and you
who would form even
the roguest of stars
into alignment,
stared -

^
If I understood this like I think I did with a little help from the dictionary :p
You meant..that sun was kind of eating wrinkled eyelashes,along with someone who had a really strong character? /:) am I right or am I right?
This is weird but I like it..specially the 'the roguest of stars into the alignment' part.

His lips were chapped
with sea salt and a
sleepless night,
buttons missing like
Pluto at war.

--

I once kept myself
tame, paint scrubbed,
tongue poking and
a smile that was
perhaps a little insane.

--

^
Aaahhhhh...aaaahhh..
You should see what head in my mind..
I saw you like,,holding yourself telling yourself 'relax mel,relax" and smiling..how cute..

I took my own hand,
one, twice.
I don't remember.

^
Melancholic much?..do want.

Nails chipped,
palms smudged
with charcoal and
a finger burnt from
a rusting ring.

^
:| again...what an image..jeezus mel.
My heart can't take this..

WHERE DO YOU GET THESE THINGS FROM???

and so I buried it
before you, sand
smothering its ruby and
your brow frowning,
1825 days later.

^
<\3..

I do know I have a certain feeling toward this piece..I kind of get it..
It was complex,had a sad melancholic tone..
vivid images..and a meaning that only deeper hearts can understand..

Tea is Tea and this is perfect.

My first nomination ever..
-drumrolls-...

Goes to this piece!

Love you mel :)