I See Straight Through You

Nice imagery and great rhymes.
Keep writing!
-X

Brilliant..u r good with words..this is another great piece.

Honstly supriced!
Wow.. This relates so much!
5/5

This is soo good :)

Aww... wow I loved this poem. As I read it, I felt like you were talking to me. I really liked the imagery you created.

I loved the beginning until close to the end the most:

"Hide yourself where ever you please
Underground or under seas
I can still hear the quiver in your words
Flying with a broken wing just like a hurt bird
Underneath that veil
I see a ship with wrecked sail
I see the pretence beneath the shame
And your eyes flooding with intense rain
Am with you when your soul is sold
Replemishing your lantern with fuel in fold
You portray to the world a happy soul
But deep down,l see you not whole"

Very deep words and so lovely to read. Well done