Amidst falling leaves

by Jenni   Oct 2, 2011


Never did I expect my favorite
blanket to lose its threads or
even leave me dangling on a string,
but I shouldn't hold on to what
used to be.

These deceitful smiles the sun
sends down to me every morning,
leave me crestfallen, but I'll revive felicity.

Rather than trudge along falls avenues
I'll lilt to inaudible melodies.

Amidst falling leaves
you're dancing, my pace slows down
and your ease filled movements
lure me like his kisses did.

I wonder whether you feel my
desirous gaze as you stand still
and look right into my eyes.
I'm excited, but I withstand
because even stronger than
my shame are hidden cravings.

We exchange coy glances;
you eyeball me, which shows
that your curiosity is just
as big as mine.
This wicked atmosphere
reminds me of my wistful
memories and resurrects
abandoned wishes.

Is this a new beginning..
a new love rising amongst fallen leaves
Or should I just start sewing
and enjoy my reveries?

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  • 12 years ago

    by Dr sarat sonowal

    'Amidst the fallen leaves'..a very interesting title you chosed ...loved the write from first to last

  • 12 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    "This wicked atmosphere
    reminds me of my wistful
    memories and resurrects
    abandoned wishes."

    Those lines... are so...beautifully penned; they really left me speechless on how well this poem has been written, Jenni.

    5/5

    -Heather

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow! Jenni! I'm speechless... this poem is so beautiful and was such a joy to read!! I loved the title, it caught my eye! There's something about fall and all the leaves scattered around... I think I also loved the fact that where I am in the world, it is fall and there are leaves absolutely everywhere!

    I think your choice of words were beautiful and perfect.. you told a lovely story.. and I loved the comparisons to falling leaves.. the ending was hopeful but still mysterious!

    Amazing poem dear!!! =D

  • 12 years ago

    by Jessie

    Really Really enjoyed this poem, it had a gentle feel to it, but the emotion was quite prominent. I am conflicted with the last stanza though
    "Is this a new beginning..
    a new love rising amongst fallen leaves" I love the simplicity of this

    but

    I found the next two lines after that seemed forced and didn't seem to really close up the poem the way it deserved. Other than that. Good job

  • 12 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    This is the first poem I have read of your but definitely wont be the last. The very first stanza pulled me in-it flowed great to me and
    I am sure it stands a very good chance in the contest. Loved the title, perfect for the season. Loved the comparison of the tattered blanket/relationship. You are a fantastic writer. Good Luck!

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