Lovestruck.

Wow is so...refreshing- your descriptions are breath taking. it's so different and unique.

I really LOVE this, great work, an amazing way of expression, I can't wait to read more

Short but very meaningful poem. The sanity of whole piece hide in fertile thoughts about Pancake. You are very creative, the symmetry of your poem is obviously original and cleverly written..it is very impressive:)

Oh i like the idea of pancake, very creative, a lovely poem :)

Temps,

This was one sticky sweet poem and I adored it. The idea of someone being a pancake house was intriguing, never heard anyone described in such a way so well done for bringing a new and original idea to poetry. I wasn't so sure how you went from palms to spine, I understood what you were going for here but I wonder why you chose the spine instead of wrist or arm, or something closer. The idea of having hands covered in maple was an interesting metaphor but yes I was quite surprised when you mentioned spine because the imagery completely changed for me, the positions of the people, at first I imagined two people sitting together face to face then obviously he had her back to her.. I did love that element of surprise however, perhaps I'm looking too deep.

The connecting of maple and sappy was a great idea, reminded me of a tree of course but I liked how you took those two elements that seemed totally unrelated and related them.

This was lovely and it's great to read something new from you. Sorry it has taken me so long to comment!

Mel.