Illiterate Bilingual

I believe this poem would be as beautiful in any language Amazing!

I had to read through this poem a couple of times to get the message of this poem but I finally got it and I was impressed! Your words weave sadness into each line that seeps into the line following and on and on till the very in. I love how you used your imagery in this poem to give me a picture of a lost mind it seems trying to remember what it has known all along but has suddenly forgotten it. Your message portrays your longing to express your inner most feelings but yet you have forgotten how to speak these words or even portray them. Wonderful!

"Stripped all the words out of me
that I suffer now to convey a simple
message about my longings,
it's with you that I learned a new
language, but giving up on my native
tongue was nothing I ever planned"
^^^
This was my favorite stanza and I loved every word of it. The sad emotions you pour into this poem is simply amazing and the hopes you write of but that you know won't come to pass is simply incredible. You always now how to describe what is inside your heart and I am always deeply impressed by that! :]

Anyway, I hope you continue to write and that you always show the same strong feelings and emotions in this poem as all your others have portrayed. Your heart yearns for love and happiness and I can tell in each of your poems for this longing and I hope you can get it and keep it forever one day! Great job and keep writing!

Agree with Sherry, your write shows so much elegance, and smoothness.

I was hooked by the following ideas which correspond to a mid.... omg, what a beautiful mind you have. so deep...so deep:

"My longings are too wild that I
fail to find the right words to tell
you about..."

^ how do you do that?

"it's with you that I learned a new
language, but giving up on my native
tongue was nothing I ever planned"

^ Damn it! You should put this in your profiled. It's so damn original.

mmm.. the only thing I wasn't interested in and thought that it doesn't change anything was this:

"
It's sad how I fail to write a complete
sentence neither by your complicated
language, nor by my own tongue,
that I gave up on
(for you)"

^ You already said that in a way or another... and if you're emphasizing only, then I don't know... it kind of represents the only black hall in this solid perfect wall!

ANYWAY

"guess that makes out of me both :
illiterate, and unfaithful...

I wonder if that..rings a bell ?"

^ lol, hahha.. I said to myself. It's an amazing way to tell him YOU'RE SHIT in such a strict, respectful way. I LOVE this end. So powerful..

Way to go Nana :D

Amazing. I often feel as though I am unable to peace together a simple sentence anymore. It seems as though the language of love is totally different than any native tongue and I find myself lost trying to express my thoughts and feelings... in both languages.

You manage to always write with such elegance and class.

I enjoy being seduced my your mere words. It feels as though with each poem you have penned that somehow you have tapped into my soul and taken my emotions and breath with each line.