Mel- You paint poetry.... I understand now why your poetry is so unique... because you truly paint the words... Ive read this piece many times and I decided to comment... There are some pieces that I feel speak for themselves and that you truly can't comment... this is one of those poems that I feel like that... but I had to tell you that this pieces really got to me... Its very deep and monumental for you, I can feel that... and I just wanted you to know that it affected me ....very touching..
7 years ago
Wow, this is so deep, great imagery and some fantatic analogies, i love the tinge of sadness and the tone works perfect here. You truly have a way with words.
is often rolled up in all her metaphors and she catches
the attention of everyone with all her complexity,
but every once in a blue moon. she has this thing,she tip toes out of her comfort zone..and put the complexity aside and BAM! this is what you get,
a write that hits you like the waves with rocks sometimes,
I had to do some research on the proverb she was speaking about in this write..
and it goes like "Let her be as the loving hind and pleasant roe; let her breasts satisfy you at all times and be you ravished always with her love."
and it fits perfectly in the poem, and the fact that she
only wrote the number of the proverb instead of the whole thing gives it this mysterious feel..
"With the night sky
beneath my eyes"
I never knew you could have the sky lingering beneath your eye, but when you dig deeper I guess it means
being sleepless and having dark circles beneath the eye..