Daylight Savings

Oh my gosh.....within 10 lines this managed to choke me up at the end. . Here you described something so beautiful...the scenery of the ocean, of you taking pictures of creatures in the sea, the way this person stood back and observed you...I smiled. Then that last line. It brings so much sadness because its clear you are no longer with this person and this was just a painful memory.

You said I was clumsy, mind tangled in every poem, sand nesting in the salt bitten curls of my hair.

^^ this is what makes the poem sad. First of all, I love salt bitten curls...oh my god I feel like high fiving you because that was just phenominal wording there...but second of all, the quick snippet of "mind tangled in every poem" showed this person really knew you. The true you and your true emotions....which makes the thought of them not being there even worse.

I loved this piece. Youre amazing.

I recited this because it was simply awesome.

Lovely imagery and emotion crammed into a small poem,

Easily my first nomination for this week.

A beautiful piece.... I like the way you share a sweet and small memory giving it a vivid imagery and the picture seems so perfect here... I liked it... :)

OMG, Mel.

You should help Lana Del Rey in writing songs. Her soul and your writings match perfectly.
Many things were said above. I just want to say: PERFECT.

Beautifully written.
I love the metaphors and the hidden emotions within it.
Very different then many poems I have read, but so well written. I like the tap dancing on blue jellyfish, really elegant. Great job.
5/5