Blue Serenades

Loved the constant repetition of deep, night blue. It underlines how important it is and it gives this poem strength. Great addition with the Italian bit in the end too!
A touching write, I must say. Much enjoyed.

" but everynight I will
wait by the pond, ignorant of
traffic lights rebounding, "

Every night should have a space between it :)

I love this part of the poem the most. I feel it was really beautiful, and for some strange reason I really like the word ignorant.. especially in poetry lol. I feel like it's such a word that every person can relate to, as we deal with it ourselves or in other people. Ignorance is bliss sometimes, too, right? lol

This is really beautiful and you've created yet another poem with beautiful images that were very clear in my mind. I wasn't overly fond of the repetition with the blue part, it seemed a bit out of place to me and kind of forced even. But the rest of it was freakin' a beautiful, MA!

I was thinking of a midnight blue as I read this, often blue is associated with sadness & you worked it in so well here. Hope all is okay with you. This write is so emotional, it's hard to imagine what it would be like without a special someone in your life. That helpless feeling of not being able to do anything for them is one of the worst, it makes your heart break. I love how even though youre sad, you find light in daily life. Beauitful things such as the moonlight, swans, & a ponds reflection symbolizes hope, closure & brighter days rather than the deep blue color you keep seeing. Lovely piece!