The flame

by zombiepikachu   Jan 23, 2013


The way he
holds the forestry,
fragrance with his

sweater sleeves rolled
up he cuts down the tree
with his body trembling
oh the noise, is loud

with a soft voice he will
speaklikealamb lulling
lulling sleep quietly and
he is, he is he is
my own

her own. he Lights up
a flame (under the water)

*note: required to write a poem in e.e. cummings style. I love this style!

-z

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  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Uhmm uhmm.. how can someone light up a flame under the water?

    i like the way this piece was constructed, I also like the thought process of how i was picturing the tree being cut down and this someone having his sleeves rolled up as it's shaking and the loud noise. My thoughts as I read it was that this someone was cutting the tree to create a fire.. but then under the water.. the idea of the flame went poof! there is no flame.

    then I am thinking that I am missing something because its in the love poems...

    would it be in reference to the love that is shown with your words of how this someone cuts the tree... I have no clue.

    • 12 years ago

      by zombiepikachu

      It was written to describe my boyfriend. It wasn't about how much I love him. It was just about his essence. Capturing him.

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