It Sneaks Up

Captivating all round

Nice

One of the different poem here and new to read like this.
keep writing..

Comment from Round 1 of FOP contest:

I admire how you took a different path than I guess I would have assumed from first reading this. It's easy to think pain could have been the category you were going for here, but aiming towards hate actually portrays so much more that's unsaid, but gives the reader that opportunity to wonder and care for this person. I like how indirect this is- you worded and placed your words cleverly to never truly say whether this is literal or not... I had many perspectives, one being self-harm, but then when you wrote "placed against her cheekbones", I thought maybe this girl is isolating herself from the world for all the times she has been portrayed. I like how you take this one moment in time and describe how real it is to the reader, that this isn't just dramatized, each breath almost becomes too much weight to handle. I also liked the "whendiditbecomeso", because I feel that frustration, and also that shame for feeling so futile to stop it.

Very nice.. this is the first time I got into a poem like this.. I have a lot of hate and it feels perfect with this