Operation

Comment from Round 1 of FOP contest:

I like the very commonplace, center idea that you take the route of for pain. I think an operation may be the last thing on some of our minds because we expect emotional pain or heartbreak or the pain of losing someone... but you take it literally and I like how you interpret pain with this scene so clear and relatable in my head, then take a twist at the end and provoke a bigger picture idea. This is very simply worded, but the almost exhausted atmosphere you present in this poem make me believe this is becoming routine for this girl, and that she is fighting something she has no power over. My favorite lines were there last three. You made it more open, speaking of her flesh like everything she is composed of, and having that vulnerability towards not just viruses or diseases but any negative emotion. Good job.

I would say this expressed well a pins and needles feeling

I like your style

I find this poem made me think.. which is what a good poem does. The feeling of pain is not a good one and you decribed it so well. No one can know how touch feels unless we go through it. Maybe you could try your own experience with it. I feel it is easier to decribe if there is truth to it but great poem. 5/5.

Ps. I love how all your poems make the reader think.. dont change that!