Even In Death, She Grows

Judge Comment:

Nature and death go hand in hand- The author of this piece took this to new heights in creativity and I admire the beauty of this piece immensely.

Even in death, new growth- rebirth begins it's one of the most fascinating gifts of life.
There is sorrow and sadness, but also a positive and refreshing beauty as well.

I adore the word usage, bringing this little nature piece to life from start to finish.

This poem is a touching display of life after death, and I feel I'm being repetitive in my comment, but I can't express enough just how elegant this piece is, Beautiful!

OMG i've never really loved to read "nature" poems since they are normally for me very uninteresting but you changed my mind about that!!! even my own poem doesn't compare to this poem and it's down right beautiful 5/5

Ashlin

Whilst hummingbirds
croon requiem

^ Whoa. Stunning wording...

Omggg....Im not sure how others have commented on this piece, but I simply cant. This is such a deep and gorgeous nature piece. That ending sentence holds so much power in it!!

From the opening stanza to the ending line, Hannah this was flawless...Only 1 person truly captivates me with nature poetry and thats Andrea, but this had me melted. I love it!!

Hannah, I cannot believe this has no comments...because you truly captured something beautiful and sad in this piece...
It has that sombre like quality while still bringing such a beautiful serene imagery forth in the words.

The morning mourns today;
dewdrops snivel
and daisies droop,
twirling their stems
into an endless daisy chain.

^^This is a powerful stanza to start with, the opening line is just brilliantly penned, to set the scene, of morning, dark clouds... my only critique is the use of daisies and daisy...I feel that the last line would flow better removing the word "daisy" as we already know what flower you've mentioned and the flow here was a little rocked with that but that's just an opinion.

Whilst hummingbirds
croon requiems,
dirt sweeps patiently,
inviting wilted petals
into her new home -
to be another's
future.

^^"Hummingbirds croon requiems", WOW, at first I got a bit caught in that sentence but it says more than just a hummingbirds sang, brilliant!!

Even in death,
she grows.

^^That ending was so beautiful...

You have such a way with words that drew me in from the beginning...I just was swept with the gentle sadness that was evident and the beauty and nature exquisite.

I loved reading this piece

xxx