Moon child

I like this emotional poem. A wonderful work!

Nice poem really like it
keep it up :)

Love these lines:-
After sunset,
the moon approached the sky
with a full phase.
and with a dark coat
the sky left a mountain village;
a heavy snow.

goood job mohan i feel happy too because an indian wrote it... loved it

After sunset,
the moon approached the sky
with a full phase.
and with a dark coat
the sky left a mountain village;
a heavy snow.

Wonderful stanza! I think there's no need for a semicolon (;) after the word village.

Meanwhile, on the surface,
in a 10 degree Fahrenheit;
a couple of trees got hidden
with the sky's raging storm,
as a four year old, bewildered
and lost, walked alone
while imploring for his mom.

The expression "in a 10 degree Fahrenheit;" sounds better if replaced with something like "in a freezing moments" or something better. Yet you have to specify the child. For example "a four year child, boy or girl. I love this stanza.

A few hours ago,
they were crossing a bridge,
but with slip of a foot, his mom
first threw his child to safety
to then fall down a river.

The expression "his mom first threw his child" is confusing. I think you better change it to read "his mom
first threw him".

The child, unaware he became an orphan,
kept searching for his mother
within the vicinity of the river;
for his only sustain, a woman of life,
because his father was like the sky;
a raging storm that left him alone
in the cold.

A loveable stanza.

Until at last!
Highlighted by the moonlight
the child uttered:
"mom, I found you!!"

This stanza has to be adjusted as the punctuation used is confusing.

For example:

Until at last,
highlighted by the moonlight,
the child uttered:
"Mom, I found you!!".

Thank you two for sharing this with us.

Very chilling. does the child die or does the moon become his mother? very dark, and very touching...

my only real criticism is this line
" in a 10 degree Fahrenheit;"

such a precise measurement feels scientific, metallic, and out of place with the beautiful imagery and personification youve got going every where else. maybe express how cold it is through narrative instead? mention frosted grass or something literally frozen?

i think it would make the whole piece a lot more cohesive