Just Hold My Hand

by Love Fallacy   Aug 5, 2013


A young boy about 18
peach fuzz on his chin
Daydreamin in English class
with that silly looking grin

Schools out for the summer now
he'll work his nine to five
Saving for that diamond ring
serving burgers and fries

A love so young and innocent
they lived without a care
Sharing all their secrets
and their deep and darkest fears

Their passion growing stronger
more intimate they become
Kissing her supple lips
to love they do succumb

Summer's coming to an end
he drops onto a knee
Will you be me future
and choose to marry me

She pulls him up from his knee
as a tear hits the ground
I've been keeping something from you
something the doctor found

She says that I have cancer
and that there is no cure
Not much longer left to live
this i am for sure

I've dreamt to be your bride
to wear that special ring
But now i'll move up to the sky
and listen to the angels sing

My pain is growing stronger
this is not what i had planned
As i start to slip away
please just hold my hand

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  • 10 years ago

    by HeightenedAwareness

    Beautiful..

  • 10 years ago

    by TSI25

    Devastatingly sad. its a classic story in some modern romance movies. i hope this hasnt happened to you. structurally the poem is sound and it has good flow. some of it felt a bit like slang - for instance "of this i am for sure" isnt wrong grammatically i dont think, but it feels a bit clumsy. maybe another proof reading aloud could be beneficial.

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert

    I thought this was written with a good amount of time put into it. I would like to add though that your 5th stanza need's work. Typo's are in due need of help since you didn't read this over before posting haha. Nice work though.

  • 10 years ago

    by Aveena

    This was a lovely piece, it had me on edge.

    One thing though:
    -in the second line I believe the word should be HE, it kind of disturbs the whole flow with the spelling mistake.

    "Summer's coming to an end
    HE drops onto a knee
    Will you be me future
    and choose to marry me"

  • 10 years ago

    by Amreen

    Lovely.. !
    Very touching poem and I loved the rythmic flow of it due to the rhyme. And such a sad story you shared with us. Truly touched my heart to see such true love among the two.

    Awesome:)