I walk round with a constant taste of nostalgia hidden under my tongue
And the devil on my shoulder is always whispering into my ear
About my secrets of yester-year and the shame that I swept under the rug
When I was told that I need to grow up, I dug my heels in and thrust my chin defiantly at the sky
Even though I was too old for such childish behaviours
I'm still waiting for Peter Pan to swoop through my window and take me away to Neverland
(It already feels like home)
My heart is always full of longing for a time that's past
And I am left just chasing memories which dance in front of my eyes
But are forever beyond my reach
It is not easy to let go of the past but in order to move on with life we have to find a way to let go. The past is the past and whatever happened is gone.
Well penned and great write
8 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
I really liked the first line here. We all have trouble letting go of our past sometimes and it can be very haunting. It stands out well. This poem really blew me away because of the story that enfolds and I connect to it well. I really liked how you used the word nostalgia. Usually it's a great thing but here you twisted it around. The devil on your shoulder adds a nice twist as well. Everyone has secrets that are hidden. Here I like how you don't really say what they are. But it seems like your child hood was really bad. And for that we want to find that childhood as long as we can. So that leads nicely into the rest of the poem.
What really brought this poem to life for me was the innocence of peter pan.. I loved the imagery of you looking up toward the sky here :). Like you are proud of who you really are!. Though we do need to grow up sometimes we want to hold onto that innocence as long as we can. I don't think you are ever too old to be a child at heart though. Now the peter pan line really lovef that. Because it goes with the whole stanza. We all wish to fly free and live with that happiness. I loved the last line of the second stanza. When you feel like a home is not a home your imagination can take you to a great home.
Your heart always longs for a happier time that is true but you can always make new hopes and dreams though. Overall. I thought the poem held so much emotion and a very strong message from start to finish. There is a hint of sadness but there is hope for a better life. The message is that not matter what you should always be yourself and it's okay as long as you are happy. Beautiful poem overall. And nominated.!!
8 years ago
by Midnight Sky
Beautiful poem the second stanza my favorite it has deep heart to it i love how you put the wording really amazing i loved this whole thing when i read in the contest i couldn't wait to give a comment beautiful just beautiful joss i was shock when you didn't win really this is a winner p&l midnight sky