The Bind of Blinds

by JaneDoeWrites   Apr 6, 2014


My writings have held
crooked verses recently,
much like the smiles we wore
when we first met- both of us
tremoring from a feverish awe
and anxiousness.

This illness
we never sought out cures for;
unavoidably lying wasted in bed,
sharing cigarettes and talking until
the sun illuminated each crack in the
blinds above our heads.

My tongue has held
crooked meanings lately,
much like those same blinds
although now slightly tilted
from looking to see if you were hiding
just out of my window- but instead
where I imagined you, all the flowers
wilted.

I tremor
from the chill of your absence,
this loneliness a sickness I'm
increasingly becoming sickened with,
raiding my medicine cabinets as if
I were a stranger in my own
stone-walled megalith.

Unavoidably lying wasted in bed,
chain smoking cigarettes and
twirling my fingers in the ash, until
the sun reaches through the blinds and
burns my eyes from the cracks.

Where I'm silently loyal and happy to bide,
these walls absorbing all that's left of my time;
and distance is a creak in the floor
I convincingly wished were you,
where in the frost I have my arms crossed,
awaiting my tried and true.

**A/N: On the topic of long-distance relationships.**

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  • 8 years ago

    by Lune de ma vie

    WOW! This is such a powerful poem with so much truth behind it, I relate and feel this within my bones. Long distance is hard and I've been through it will always hold onto hope as well.. But enough about me.

    You penned such a spot on poem with so much raw emotion in each stanza and each sentence within each word your heart and soul is heard pouring out your emotions.

    I loved you how much let it go and expressed your feelings in a way that sparks the reader to envision all you've structured on this piece in such detail with so much power.

    It is a true statement of beauty and strength to pen a poem with such emotion and vulnerability.

    Excellent job!
    Raw so very raw and an awesome poem.
    Wish I could nominate. :)
    5/5
    Brought a tear to my eye.

  • 10 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Such a powerful piece of poetry. Absolutely adore the word usage, it really gives that feeling of loss and longing, that ache that the heart feels through distance.
    You are just amazing, and you write so beautifully, with so much emotion and conviction. Really lovely piece Crystal. Thanks for sharing :)
    xxxxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Honestly Crystal, I have no idea what this poem is about. But I'll try to comment. I believe this poem is about you and your lovers stage through the time you had together. You did a great job showinh the emotions at the beginning when two people fall in love. There is always a nervous feeling in both people. And as the story enfolds you seem to get more and more sad. Along the way you seem to have lost (them) by death or tbe relationship doesn't feel the same at all. The wording is fantastic though. I loved the addictions in the poem too because it does enhance the sadness you seem to write about. Losing a loved one makes you feel lost and alone and generally people cope with negative ways. The last stanza stood out to me because you always want to bide your time never wanting to wake up for the day and put on a happy face. Anyways, tbe story here is wonderful. Well done.

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