In the shade of your heart (Double Oddquain butterflies)

by Meena Krish   Aug 4, 2015


You
have erased
my bleak moments with
a touch of your compassion,
Now...
I cry with a whole heart not
wanting to loose
this special
bond;
Changed
is my life
for I can with peace
walk in the shade of your heart,
And...
without been judged or questioned
feelings can rest in
your open
arms.

Oddquain butterflies - a "merged mirror oddquain" where the
two stanzas of a mirror oddquain are merged together, one of
the middle 1 syllable lines is dropped, resulting in one nine
line stanza of the form 1-3-5-7-1-7-5-3-1. Please note that a
oddquain butterfly is not a "oddquain" because it doesn't have
five lines, but it is "butterfly" made up of two oddquains that
were merged together into one poem.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Meeeeeena!!!!! WOW!

    I love it when you write like this, you have such a beautiful control over language and this is juuuuust Wooooonderful!!!

    You have a way of painting so much emotion and imagery when you write that it just engulfs the reader so much....when the heart speaks you just can't help but stop and listen.....Beautiful!

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Meena what a beautiful poem....I love seeing and reading all the different forms of poetry...

    Changed
    is my life
    for I can with peace
    walk in the shade of your heart,
    And...
    without been judged or questioned
    feelings can rest in
    your open
    arms.

    These words really touched my heart it is such a good feeling to have someones unconditional love where you can be yourself and they make you feel so secure and safe.
    excellent job on the form.
    Lov Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Wow !!!! With the passing times .........the bonds of love strengthening .........compassion brings in peace and tranquility.........Wonderful piece with an amazing form .
    Meena you are so talented:)

  • 8 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I love this. While reading this piece all I could think was love as love is compassionate, understanding, and much more.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A clever piece and very well written.