Saffron Metaphors (Villanelle)

Perfect flow and rhyming scheme. Loved that the title was either extracted from the poem, or the poem itself inspired by the title. Mentioning Saffron metaphors in the last stanza just gave this a nice taste.

I enjoyed reading and rereading. There is a field in this poem, a whole field.

Also the form has a very lyrical musical sound in its repetitive pattern, which also added beauty and I bet it is challenging to build it the way you did without falling somewhere. So hats off !!

What a beautiful piece this is....it reaches out and grips the heart of the reader.
Take care
Cindy

Hello Koan,

wow, this is a wonderful Villanelle. Like Meena, i have had a stab at this form, but all the attempts get screwed up into a ball and tossed into the bin. Trying to find the right line that fits into the overall theme is the hardest and then the rhyme scheme and meter... well all this is a challenge and some, but you have pulled the rabbit out of the hat in my eyes.

This is my favourite stanza:
In sorrow's whirlpool my merriment days still lay
Yet, with a hope-winged heart, perpetual dreams I chase
Oh let this drowning plea strike heaven's azure bay
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Being happy but still being unhappy in ones core is bitter sweet and your words are beautiful, like: Hope-winged heart. Wanting/ hoping for a heart to feel carefree and full of love...

Well done. I am sorry I cannot nominate this right now.

Take care,

Michael

I have become Tyrant Love's languishing prey

^^I like the combination here. A tyrant as we know is brutal and a big bully but to be in the clutches of a tyrant's love now one can say that there is a softness. Or because you don't want to fall in its trap but at the same time can't help but be a tyrant love. At least that is what I can get at.

Villanelle- now for this form I honestly can never write this form. Have tried but never works out like the way you have penned it here. Its so flawless-the rhymes, rhythm, usage of words and the portrayal of emotions has all come hand in hand with beauty! Excellent work!

Another stunning write, Koan; keep it up!
All the best,
Ben