Destruction at it's finest

by deeplydesturbed & Brenda   Aug 28, 2016


Half dead willows, fluttering in the breeze,
by a dull lifeless stream trickling of stagnant water.
Creaking branches of old, long lived oak trees,
branches brittle, ready to snap.
Flowers long gone, curled and brown.
The forest, an old dream...
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Acid rains weeping down,
corroding our world, killing our flora,
infecting our fauna,
gouging everything it comes in contact with...
The Earth was never just ours..
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Animals dying out,
some species long gone.
Now it's too late; yet we still hold hope.
Hope for a future, on another planet
that we are destined to destroy.
For we are the virus....

Brenda and Deeplydesturbed

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  • 5 years ago

    by Jenn

    I gotta say I'm not into Nature poems, but I really liked this!
    The ending

    "Animals dying out,
    some species long gone.
    Now it's too late; yet we still hold hope.
    Hope for a future, on another planet
    that we are destined to destroy.
    For we are the virus...."

    is such a true statement, really creatively penned. Though I agree with it, I never would have come up with that metaphor!
    "For we are the virus...."

    5. Jenn

  • 5 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    I'm sorry guys this piece skipped my eye. ... anyway this nature poem is a must read poem. ..delicately written by 2 talented poet.... Well done guys

    Gel

  • 5 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    This topic must be taken strictly by the government, otherwise the forest will become history; afterall forest is also very very necessary for humans as it helps us in many ways.

    If humans will keep on going like this, then I think the result could be disastrous.

    I think the writer has done a very good job creating a fantastic poem on this topic. No problems with the writing style.

    Humans are not destroying only the forests but also a beautiful domains.

    Well done.

  • 5 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Corrections:

    In the title, "it's" should be "its".

    "Long lived" should be hyphenated, to read "long-lived".

    Other than that, this was a raw write about a very hot topic (hah, get what I did there?) in the news: the destruction of our own planet. You can't exponentially increase production of a harmful chemical on a global scale and not expect it to have negative consequences. We literally are destroying our future ... and what will humans learn from that?

    From your poem, you presume nothing.
    I think the same.

    Naomi and Brenda, you have done a wonderful job painting a moving tale of our present and future. I'd nominate it if I could, but lo and behold I am too late -- as are we in saving our planet.

    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

  • 5 years ago

    by DarkLight

    Great write,

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