Of love so true (Rondeau)

by Michael   Jan 3, 2019


as morning breaks, my heart does too
I hear the blackbirds songs of blue,
the sun still shines in skies so clear
but grief stills rains without you here.
A wilted scene that’s missing you.

Again someday in pastures new
If what they say of death is true,
no more I’ll shed a single tear
...as morning breaks

For now I’ll mourn and dream in lieu;
until my fate, and time is due,
to be with you and hold you near
for that in death I do not fear
as life is dark, while missing you.
...as morning breaks

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  • 3 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    judging comment

    Of love so true (Rondeau) by Michael - 10 points
    This is stunning. The Rondeau is a strict form and Michael adheres to it effortlessly here. It is written in perfect iambic tetrameter (apart from the necessary shortened refrain) and the rhyming is a joy to read.
    Anyone who has lost anyone of importance will relate to the moving content: life goes on - the 'sun still shines' and the blackbird sings - but almost cruelly. How can things be normal when, for you at least, the world has been turned on its head. Then, perhaps, it is death we look forward to most in life, simply so we can be reunited with the one we have lost.
    This is easily the best Rondeau I have read on this site and one of the best full stop. It has meter, fluent rhyming and lines sprinkled with gold dust, all within the boundaries of a strict form. If I had 20 points, Michael, you would have them. Alas, it is only 10 I can offer... (10 points)

  • 5 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Beautiful piece...outstanding. Besg wishes Milly x

    • 5 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Milly :)x

  • 5 months ago

    by Mark

    Beautiful Michael!

    Again someday in pastures new
    If what they say of death is true

    • 5 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Mark :)

  • 5 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael, this really is excellent work. One of the best rondeau i've read on this site.

    • 5 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      I agree with Ben. Wow. It's really a beautiful piece, Michael!

    • 5 months ago

      by Michael

      Fine words indeed Ben, much appreciated, M :)

  • 5 months ago

    by Ya----Na

    Oh Michael, please don't write such beautiful poems. For me rondeau is the most beautiful format of rhymed poetry and you always do full justice to it. Loved it!

    • 5 months ago

      by Michael

      Sg, always some of the nicest comments, thank you :)

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