A Poem About Longing

by D.   May 4, 2019


You had folded my clothes
on the chair, and left a note
by the fruit bowl;

there was a croissant in a
Tupperware box, and some coffee
in the filter

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your cat lay in the smallest
patch of sunlight
on the same cashmere rug

we were last night.

We were one night
not strangers, then we were
no longer.

There are many sidewalks
left to wander, many
evenings left to wonder -

I sing
I regret nothing
in a crowded train
station.

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  • 4 years ago

    by Michael

    A sad piece Danial, that resonates with me on some levels.
    Nicely penned and it flows very well :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I like the layout of this and the subtle undertones. A delight to read. Milly x

  • 4 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Deep emotions and well expressed.

    • 4 years ago

      by D.

      Thanks Dagmar, STAR. :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Star

    Your words, including the title, are simple yet thoughtful.. Those simple things that are part of daily life, are the most that cause the longing...

    I am not a master in writing, but the part that Ben pointed out, I get where you’re going with it. I do that sometimes as well, I know it may be or sound wrong but it just carries a different feel, at least for me :)

    • 4 years ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I understand, Daniel. It's one of those!

  • 4 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This moved me thoroughly, Daniel. If you haven't seen the film, I suggest you watch 'Before Sunrise', not least because it's marvellous but also because it will resonate with anyone who can write a piece so full of yearning and emotion.

    we were last night.

    ^
    should this be 'we were on last night'? Not sure.

    Take care.

    • 4 years ago

      by D.

      Thanks Ben.

      I had originally written ‘on’ but I wanted ‘were’ to imply ‘be together’ as a main verb, but I guess it could sound weird haha.

      I’ve heard of that film. I’ll definitely give it a watch. :)

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