Shy

by Lance Hardy   Oct 8, 2004


I stare in awe,
She smiles, and gah!
My life grows brighter,
My knees strain tighter.
I have longed to speak,
But I feel so bleak.
My words are mapped,
But inside, they are trapped.
She continues on,
Walking further along.
I've lost all hope,
But no time to mope.
I cannot act dumb,
A new time has come.
Oh beautiful girl,
You are my pearl.
You will never know,
How I've longed for you so.
While time will pass by,
I will try and try.
Though I may fail,
I'll follow the rail,
Around the bend,
Until the end.

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  • 19 years ago

    by Red Charm

    Good flow and good poem

  • 19 years ago

    by Andrea

    ahhh, this must be love...

  • 19 years ago

    by TrUtH hUrTs

    mmmph ...good flow...but methinks uve used too much rhyming....so it sorta mars the otherwise wistful beauty of this piece...keep writing:)

  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "I'll follow the rail.
    Around the bend,"
    for those two lines, I would suggest getting rid of the period after rail, so that it sorta is explained and completed by the next line. Hey I wouldn't worry about the syllables, not all poems need perfect syllables. I think the words you used in your rhymes were very true-to-life, and you did a great job expressing your pent up agony. My favorite lines were:
    "My words are mapped,
    But inside, they are trapped."
    Because I know what you mean by that, it is just you put it so well.

  • 19 years ago

    by Aken Sol

    My, my Lance, you are quite the poet. The sllables are off, but it flows well so meh, we can forgive you on that. Follow the rail, i like that.
    Aken Sol

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