You

by Jacob Perry   Feb 8, 2005


You haunt me
you don't even know it though

you scar me
but i still don't show it

I'm lost with out you
but you'll never know it

you have a new love now
but you act like i don't know it

you act like I'm not in front of you
when right up in your face

you act as if we never loved
and spit it at my face

you kill me and torture me
like I'm nothing, something that doesn't deserve life

but the truth is all i wanted
is to be with you for life

©jacob

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  • 16 years ago

    by xjessx

    I think that this is my favourite poem by you. or at least one of them. I've said this a couple of times, but you really do have a way with words. keep writing!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sole

    Interesting . . . can't really say I liked it all that much - but each critic has their own individual opinion. . . The flow was good, except for the second line - take off the though from the end perhaps? And the structure was good, even with the repeated lines which took the power from the poem.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I think some stanza's had the impact taken away from them such as: you kill me and torture me. The two me's steal from each other as well as always writing but you'll never know it.

    Word choice is important :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Poetvoices

    5/5. You were already on my faves list, b/c I really enjoy your stuff! Good work!
    Kris
    BTW, I've already given you a nickname in my head. You're Jakey. Nope, you don't have a choice! lol!

  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren

    Aww this is so sad. and so good. i can relate well to this.
    thank you for your comment. i appreciate it a lot.
    good poem again
    lauren

    ((you're in my favorites XD))