My fantasy

by Shana   Mar 9, 2005


Your kiss makes me tremor
lips of crimson red
Your hair is so soft
on your precious head

Everything about you
is shimmering gold
Without your love
I would be cold

You bear good
You are pure Ecstasy
but you are only
my fantasy

My shortest one thus far... tell me what you think... It has been a while since I wrote so I don't know really how good it is...

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  • 18 years ago

    by chloe

    i dont think the lengh matters, as most of my poems are short, as long as it flows well and puts a good message across then a short poem is as good as a long one! i think its great! very well written... nice 1 x

  • 19 years ago

    by Johnny Marlin 2

    Short and to the point, not a bad thing. Take care I am glad to see you writing more. Take care...

  • 19 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    It was short but to the point u can always add to it later if u decide. Very well written I liked it! If u would check out some of mine and comment I always could use advice. Thanx!

  • 19 years ago

    by jennifer

    Am glad that you are back and writing again always amazing as usual thats why your on my favorites keep up the great work:)

  • 19 years ago

    by Amilo

    I thought it was decent... I liked the last line, quite emotional and articulate, but the overall poem could use a bit more orginality.

    Question ... "Your kisses make me tremor".. how would you know, if "you are only, my fantasy"? ^.^

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