Depression

Nice Job....the last line seems a bit forced or I dono something like that...can't quite put my finger on it...but yea...nice job...luv yas mwah

-kayla-

Wow, an extremely short poem and yet you are able to convey alot in just alittle... Good job, although depressing I enjoyed reading it.

nice, short, but powerful. take care.

This is another awesome poem from u! i like the way it sounds..n i think i could relate to the feeling

Expand, expand, expand. Explore the subject more. Include more emotion. Make the reader feel satisfied. Be creative and original and it could be great. It isn't bad, but it could be better. Take care.

~rolo