Dumb but alive

by *~*Heart.Shaped.Rose~*~   May 21, 2005


So you get your slap on the back
Do you think that makes you Better than me?
I used to be just like you
Then i opened my eyes to what i really see

Society, class, stature and morality
Thats what rules your empty mind
You dont want to try and stand out
And rebel against your own kind

Safety isnt all its cracked up to be
You know your not who you think you are
Become one of us, the shadows of your past
In this square shaped world only we can go far.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Corrie

    very nice! i liked it! 5/5 *KISSES*~Corrie

  • 18 years ago

    by Arora

    It all sounds good... maybe you can work on the last verse a bit though n_n

  • 18 years ago

    by EoB

    Agree with No Motiv..that was my fav part.

    The rhyming scheme was good, and it had a nice flow=)

    Keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by EoB

    Agree with No Motiv..that was my fav part.

    The rhyming scheme was good, and it had a nice flow=)

    Keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by No Motiv?

    My favorite part was "In this square shaped world only we can go far"....that's simply ingenious. The rest of them poem....I liked the rhyming scheme and the message portrayed. Great job.

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