What you've done

by allison   Jun 22, 2005


I remember the day we first met
I gave you a hug and knew that I would never forget

Months have passed since you left me
I’v only been getting worse they all can see

My friends, my family they see me cry
They know you’ve left me to literally die

All day and all night the tears just flow
Your friends tell you what you did, All you say is “So?”

My days are numbered, I wont stay much longer
It’s obvious I wont get any stronger

Here's the gun thought I’d never have to touch
But here it is in my clutch

Im crying now, not for me for you
I try and remember all those times you called me your boo

Please don’t cry when im gone
It was all my fault, you did nothing wrong

I should’ve been way prettier
I wish this could have been easier

So if you ever read this
I want you to know I cared

I love you more then you ever knew
Even though it’s been forever since you said “I love you too”

It’s time to leave, My time has come
Why’d you have to act so dumb?

Laying here, writing my last good bye’s
Gun to my head, time to get away from these lies

I love you all , thanks for doing what you can

Goodbye

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  • 18 years ago

    by Wintersolstice

    I dunno if its "Slang" or not...hmm, but its interesting. Its a two lined stanza which makes it less common. Very emontional. As I always say the fact that there is passion in a poem is the main thing. X

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie84

    Well I will start by saying I hope this is just a writing and not real life.

    This piece is full of emotion. The pain of losing someone can be so hard and you have portrayed that through your words.

    My favorite lines..."Here's the gun thought I’d never have to touch
    But here it is in my clutch" I don't like the thought of it but you put it down nicely although I think you could maybe use a different start to the first line. Maybe something like "The very thought of the gun I'd never touch...." Not telling you to change it just making a suggestion. I know I don't change my writing because someone said so...but I do appreciate the feed back...

    Don't ever think you have to be prettier! That won't make him stay and if it did why would you want him anyway....NICE WRITE! :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashli

    nice job! i saw a couple little things here and there that i would fix/change, but it's nothing big...nice flow, great wording!

  • 18 years ago

    by ┼¢r¥ing▲§øul╬╧

    good luck moving on ? i'm sorry for whoever said that to you. this is an amazingly written poem. it got to me it was heartbreaking and powerful. keep writing and don't ever give up on anything. remember no matter whats going on in life there is always something better ahead of you but saying goodbye is not the answer to your questions right now.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lonely Heart .ღ.

    amazing :)

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