Damn, I wish I had shoes.

by Red Tears Of The Soul   Aug 12, 2005


The beach, the sand...
The sun glaring at my side
sitting on my porch
that stared into the ocean

the breeze, the smell
and everybody's happy
damn all these tourist
that take away the serenity

I still can hear the waves crash
as it drowns out all the commotion
laying back, breathing...
I'm happy, finally...'

peering at the beach
into the hundreds that lay
trying to forget
what I've been yearning for

I stare into the sand
lost and mesmerized
and just unaware
that someone's staring back.

easy brown eyes
flowing black hair
beautiful face
and one great smile

she waves at my dulled look
"its not polite to stare"
But I just can't seem to help it
she blushes as I break a smile

we continue to look at one another
and I mouth a "hi"
she just looks me in the eye
and mouths a "hi" back

She waves for me to come over
"I can't" and point to my bare feet
She laughs pretty loudly
and responded with a shrug

That part didn't sound interesting
but I don't care
She started walking to me
and I stood to my feet

She walks over the hot sand
and signals me to come closer
I still refuse and she playfully pouts
I return her with a smile

scratching the back of my head
waiting for her arrival
I really want to meet her, but
Damn, I wish I had shoes.

please vote and comment.
Not one of my better pieces, it was one of those "spur of the moments" things.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ariana

    Hehehe, this is funny. I'd suggest changing 'I want to really meet her' to 'I really want to meet her.' Its reads as a comical interpretation of love - I liked it :)

  • 18 years ago

    by HansRik

    Needless to say, you are very talented and you are truly a poetic girl. Although I agree with Jamie in that the powerful emotion felt at the beginning seemed to fade away. Nevertheless, an excellent piece.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    Hmmm i can't say i hate but it wasn't my favorite...it was funny i must say....but you started so strong and meaninful and then it went to funny which i thought was weird it left me just like what happened

  • 18 years ago

    by silhouette fairy

    The shoes didnt come out the way they were on the screne

  • 18 years ago

    by silhouette fairy

    I think your poem is great and im very sorry you didnt have shoes
    _____
    _" ! "_
    (____!____)

    pretend that is a pair of shoes ;)

    now you have some

    lots of love

    Alllalone

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