Always loving him

by XxTeArSxX17   Aug 27, 2005


ALWAYS LOVING HIM

I never felt this lonely,
And I never felt such pain,
My heart is braking because of loves game

I lost the only person that’s ever meant a thing,
And now he’s gone,
And I am left with nothing but pain,
And I don’t know how I’m live this
Life without him by my side.
Without him I am not sure I can survive

can’t you see I can’t do anything I am so weak.
I need him by my side only with him can I speak.
With him I can stand he holds me up on my feet.
He picked me up when I was down and never made me weep.
He made me smile when; we both knew I wanted to cry.
Without him in my life I feel as thought I could die.

I never thought I love some one so much,
But everyday and ever night I spend,
I am just thinking about him and dreaming,
About him, wishing he was mine again.

I’d wait as long as I would have too
To have him by my side
I wait forever, if just for one minuet he would be mine

I am so in love and I hope that he knows.
I hope that in my actions it shows.
But I know it’s not working and I am,
sure forever’s to long and I am no one special,
I am surely not worth the wait

(C) Written By ~Ashleigh~
8/27/2005

to my ex who i love so much, and to him i am so sorry, i am trying so hard but i am not sure i be able to make it through.

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  • 18 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    This was good though the flow was kinda off alot 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Tiny Reader

    Oops didn't mean to press enter.'My heart is braking because of loves game' I liked this line a lot. Should be 'breaking' though. Good poem overall.
    Sarahx

  • 18 years ago

    by Tiny Reader

    This is good, but I think the rhythm needs a bit of work to make it easier to read.

  • 18 years ago

    by Knoxy

    Hey! thanx for commenting on my poem it meanz so much to me...and i can definetely relate to this one soo much! *hugz* i hope ur alrite..keep ur head up...hopefully everythingz workz out for the best...take care, keep on writing, this was truly amazing..5/5
    ~Luv Alwayz Knoxy

  • 18 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    Because of loves game
    loves should be love's
    the second segment is very ify, you break the lines in the middle of the sentance, and that just doesn't go well.
    'anything I am so weak.'
    should be 'anything, I am so weak.'
    a lot of missing commas.
    some one
    sould be someone
    when;
    no semmicollen needed, nor a comma.
    and I am,
    sure forever’s
    broke it again, and the comma is not a good substitute.
    the very last line isn't a good closeing.
    not bad, the subject was good, the flow was ify, 3/5

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