Where was i
by shawn hoskins Sep 21, 2005
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Where was i when you decided it was your time to go,i guess the pain you were feeling you didn't want me to know,i try to find an answer,but end up asking myself why,you could've found a different way through this if you gave it a try, now i'm left here all alone,someone who meant so much to me is gone,what a selfish thing to do, it makes me so mad, i'm so heartbroken,i've just lost the best friend i've ever had. |
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18 years ago
by N J Thornton
Sad poem. I can see you put a lot of emotion into the poem and that came through. However I feel it could be improved, so please allow me to give suggestions. Of course you don't have to take them.
Maybe a more "poetical" format instead of a paragraph would read easier.
Also on the 5th line you said "know" and it should be "now."
I really did like the ending it really sent the pain out to the reader. With small alterations this poem will be perfect. -
18 years ago
This is either my first or second fave of yours...Its hard to decide...Good Job...
5/5
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18 years agoby Jason Meres
I love the words and flow of it, would stand out alot more if it were arranged in some way...but I like the actual poem.
