Losing it

by Mona   Nov 16, 2005


Losing it

Oh Mom Thanks! For creating me,
Cheers! Life sucks, do you agree?
No off course you don't! Cause..
Life is fabulous! Applause!

My friend, Amigo, look at me,
Have a drink, rather some tea?
Why is life so precious to you?
Cause I actually have no clue.

"Live as if there is no tomorrow,
Forget the past, forget the sorrow"
So I am trying to do what you said,
But how come I am failing at that?

So I am having another smoke,
Who cares if it will make me choke?
And I am having another drink,
Is it time to visit another shrink?

Doc, did you just say I'm depressed?
You're so clever, I'm impressed!
Oh excuse me, I am too rude?!
Anything else you can conclude?

Don't look at me as if it's my fault,
Girl, don't, that's basically assault,
Why are you still here little girl?
Why did you give it a whirl?

With my fingertips I touch her tears,
She stayed with me after all these years,
Pieces shatter as the mirror cracks,
Losing others because of my attacks,
Was not as bad as losing myself.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Stephy

    Well hadent commented on this one, i love the sarcastic tone to it, love it!-xxx-

  • 18 years ago

    by I.Dont.Own.Emotion.I.RENT.

    Omg hun this poem is sooo good. its soo beautifully written! lol it also made me laugh at some parts.

    Doc, did you just say I'm depressed?
    You're so clever, I'm impressed!
    Oh excuse me, I am too rude?!
    Anything else you can conclude?

    that part is so great! chin up sweetie. your such an amazing writer. just try to get thru these tough times and things will get better. well thats what others tell me...so they havta right? lol. ok well great poem 5/5 lyl~lex

  • 18 years ago

    by Emily parsons

    Beautiful...
    The sense of saracasm really works
    keep it up
    xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Rosie

    This poem also shows a lot of emotion..i admire your poems already.
    "Doc, did you just say I'm depressed?
    You're so clever, I'm impressed!
    Oh excuse me, I am too rude?!
    Anything else you can conclude?"
    My favourite paragraph! well done babe
    Rosie xXx

  • 18 years ago

    by Kirsty

    Oh my mona...thats beautiful
    The ending shows that you have put everything you have into this poem
    I like the fact that I understand exactly how you feel when I read a poem of yours
    Well done
    Take care
    love kirsty xxxx