The Dance of Life

It started excellently but it kind of flopped towards the end.
i like this stanza the best.

'the fire crackles and stars glimmer
illuminating the path
for the next performer to enter
exhbiting the fire dance'

3/5 again from me

some nice words in there but it just wasnt together.
~Emma

The poem is original and did have this exotic feel to it as if the reader is a watcher of the scene playing out. THe word choice was fine and so were your use of details but you might just want to rerread this part as for some reason it just doesn't feel like the rest of the poem:
one which requires strength and courage
it is seen in his face
the determination to stay alive
never to give up, creating a better future

This poem is amazing. It's original, I love the words you used. I love the whole poem, it's beautiful!

Great job! 5/5

XoXo
Gaby

I like this poem. ~__^ I'm kind of confused about it though but I still think it's good.

What an amazing metaphor, seriously. I love it!

"the fire crackles and stars glimmer
illuminating the path"

^Also beautiful imagery, that is only one example. There were several great ones through out the poem. Really, that was awesome.