Twisted Tears

by LovelyDivine   Aug 1, 2006


Tears of Sorrow, of Joy and Happiness,
Never thought it would end like this.
Emotions being thrown up and down,
Sometimes I think I'd rather drown.

But it seems that I am drowning,
I'm drowning in my own tears,
Tears of sadness and full of fears.
I'm drowning in my twisted tears.

Time has passed but you're still in my heart,
While thinking of you, I'm falling apart.
All that we had was it all in vain?
Now I'm just laying in al my pain.

Laying in all of this pain,
Feeling like I'm going insane.
Forever will I be dying?
Dying from my twisted tears.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Adelle

    The lay out of this poem really catches the eye and it is full of strong emotion a marvelous choice of words only one small mistakes:
    Now I'm just laying in al my pain. should be "all my pain"

  • 16 years ago

    by Atrum Dominatio Donum ut is Letalis of Regnum

    Very nice poem, well written and good word use.

    Nice portrayal of emotions and feelings.

    Only improvement I would suggest is the changing the first 'tears' to something else as I think it seems a little too repetative. Apart from that, it's pretty near perfect.

    5/5 well done :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Very nice poem. Your word choice is exceptionally great. The content is cohesive and coherent with the caption. Keep it up. Your poems are lively :)

    Tc
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet Fragility

    Great job. Title is original and the topic is easily related to. An emotional and fine read.
    Keep writing.
    5/5
    ~ Lainey

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, good one. Let me start with the title- it's effective and captivating. First stanza could have one extra word in the last line, because of the flow, like:
    - Sometimes I THINK I'd rather drown-
    or something like that.
    The rest of the poem is amazing, I can relate to it.

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