If you could see what I see

by Julienne   Aug 29, 2006


If you could see what I see
would you see it with your eyes
or would you feel it
with your heart
a place that holds no lies

A place of unkown treasures
that you find with great delight
waves crashing as
the soft sands squeaks
Softly treading through the night

Close your eyes and wonder
What have you found here
A place or feeling
tangible or no
A life so crisp and clear

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  • 18 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    Wow man i really like it. perfect for being so short. flowed real nice too.

  • 18 years ago

    by TracyM

    Short, but really well written. i like the words you have chosen here.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaitlyn

    This makes me feel really peaceful.
    from reading your other ones, this is my favourite.
    because the all out structure is much better set up.
    i think you are good at writing with this kind of structure.
    the rhyming wasn't forced and really fit in well.
    well written.
    (:
    kaitlynx.

  • 18 years ago

    by Hidden Feelings within these Words

    I liked this one, I read a couple of others and they were disturbing, I wasn't too cracked up about them, all in all though, you're not bad. Keep writing, you'll only improve. =) And thanks for the comment on mine. I'll read some more later on.
    -Ally

  • 19 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    Feel so peaceful while reading this...u hev a great way of expressing urself..keep it up...=)

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