Call it a bad idea

This was intriguing.. make me wonder what its about. very mysterious.

much love and many kisses,
bex

Short and very dark. ;) Maybe post it more like:

It sat in the corner,
Dark and gloomy.
Breathing air,
Stank and tomby.
"Let Me go."
To me it pleaded.
I said simply, No
And it receded.

Maybe try this one

Be careful not to force your rhymes, but other than that it was great :)

5/5

Thanks so much for your comment hun. so nice to have feedback. if you read my biog you will understand more what my poems are about :0) i really like this one, it is small yet perfectly formed.. you're ryming pairs are perfect, especially the last few lines... very good xx