Lonely Love

by *Charisma*   Dec 3, 2006


I fell within your beauty's grasp and so it pulled me in
And ne'er do I wish to ever leave it again
Comfort and strength I find when I search into your soul
And I want to be the part of you that finally makes you whole.
I've tossed aside my cautiousness and need to feel secure
Just to hold you for a moment, and pray, forever more
For tomorrow wouldn't be as bright or seem that it held hope
If I knew I'd wake up lonely, and with it always cope.
Loneliness is bitter, and it's a taste I cannot like
But empty love is worthless, and isn't worth the fight.
So if you love me, take me, tell me all that is true,
But don't leave me lonely love, if you don't love me too.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Comment #4:

    This was very passionate and sadening because of the way you long for him. You did an exellent job describing that feeling. I like it when I can feel what is being described and I can here. Wonderful job! :)
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I think this piece has good rhythm and rhyme. Very heartfelt. Great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Princess of snow

    Aww...
    I enjoyed reading the poem
    definently the last couple of lines...
    thanks for comment on my poem

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Cute poem.. good rhyme.. okay flow.. its a good poem just not my favorite.. i couldnt get into this as much as the others

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    "But empty love is worthless, and isn't worth the fight."

    Such deep and meaningful words. So true...

    This poem isn't like your other poems and while the flow seemed a bit stilted at times, it was still easy to read and easy to find a rhythem, which is one of the first things i look for when reading a poem.
    This seemed like a very deep love poem with some very well thought out words.
    Well thats how i interpreted it (sp?) (another word i can never spell =)
    So although it's not like your other work, i really enjoyed reading this one.
    (Excellent - Tara)
    5/5
    Gem and Tara

    (And in case you were wondering, Tara is one of the judges who voted yours top, although i wasn't supposed to know that, lol)

    Congratulations on winning. x

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