Though She Knows

Amazing i loved it!!!
its true.. most good things come to an end.. and i know from experiance!
keep up the good work
please comment on some of my poems! Thanks!

An effective piece. You have structured it well and made use of extended vocabulary and some repetition. Though, to improve I would suggest finding an alternative for this line in particular:

"She had the perfect boyfriend
Perfect job and perfect friends"

I know the point you are trying to make, but the use of repetition is perhaps not as good as your beginning:

"Though she knows it isn't right
Every day's another battle
Every day's another fight".

Explore different ways in which you can express how the girl had the 'perfect' life but through it away in ignorance due to drugs as you say.

Overall, good stuff dude! ;)

-Elysium.

Luv da poem

Loved it. unfortunatly, its probably too late for most people reading it. it is a very strong message.

Loved it. unfortunatly, its probably too late for most people reading it. it is a very strong message.