Dying

by Darien   Jan 17, 2007


Dying

It's been a while since I've cried myself to sleep
A feeling I thought I had grown out of for good
My playlist is stuck repeating all of our sad songs
I wish they wiped away the tears like you once did

The bomb had gone off way before the time was set
With a trigger as unpredictable as time itself
I will never really understand what truely happened
All I know is that once upon a time we were inseparable

Broken glasses of alcohol lay around my bed
Scattered are the pieces of my broken heart
A dizzy feeling and an empty heart left me lying
In misery, in my own failure, yet I manage to smile

A scent of death, decay, in a lifeless body
Untold stories hidden behind eyes that never saw
The things that went wrong and could have changed
But the last beat sets in on his dying soul

*Title inspired by the Boys Night Out song, 'Dying'*

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  • 13 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Ok so i know i've commented this poem before but everytime i read it i LOVE IT MORE&MORE&MORE&MORE!!! :]x

    its so perfect.. the flow... the choice of words.. just enough imagery to scketch a picture and still leave room for the readers interpretation.. and just so much other stuff is fantastic about this poem and i really dont know what it is.. but i'm obessesed with it i read pretty much everytime i log on .. lol.. its inspired me to try and write a really spectacular non-rhyming poem like this one.. because up until recently i didnt even like non-rhyming poems but this is just.. WOAH! heh :]x

  • 13 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. i dont even now what to say.. i absolutely love this poem.. i wish it was longer so i could keep reading lol.. the word choice was perfect.. the way you describe things are great.. almost every line was strong in itself.. the emotion it this poem gives off i think it a lot stronger because it doesnt rhyme.. more focus is put on the words than the flow .. even though was flow was great too.. :D ... i want to say so much more.. lol but i dont know what to say.. i dont really know why i love this poem but for some reason i really do.. i guess it just has that X factor that makes me want to read it over and over again :D

  • 13 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I really! really love this POEM! AMAZING! :)

    These two lines is very powerful!

    My playlist is stuck repeating all of our sad songs
    I wish they wiped away the tears like you once did

    TC! :)

  • 13 years ago

    by azii

    So beautifully written!
    Loved it
    Keep up the great work! :)

    Take care

  • 13 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    This was amazing. I don't think I've read any of your poems before but now I might have to read them all...
    I loved this poem. It was well written and very powerful. Not to mention, I can definitely relate to it. 5/5

    Cella