Cheers, (i'm on my own, but Carol's here)

by Espoirfailed   Feb 8, 2007


So with every step I take,
I will my heart to fail,
Dreaming of empty beds
And singles bars,
Messed up heads
And lonely cars,
Where your voice used to fill,
The voice that lingers still,
But only the echo of emptiness.

Lay the table for one,
I'm dining by myself,
My mum calls to check I'm not dead,
Or words to that affect.
Your memory dances in my head,
So I smash it against the wall,
But it only enhances vision.
You took me out with such precision.

So I'm turning on the television,
See Carol Vorderman making words,
And it's only four O'clock
But my head still hurts,
I think I'm coming down with something
Or perhaps it's from the vodka?
Bur I've only had the one today,
Bottles, that is.

I'm lying on my lounge floor,
Can't even think about risking the stairs,
And with every tick of the clock
My head hurts a little more,
As we all edge closer to oblivion.
A comforting nothingness,
The false sense of waking up with you
(mixed with the drink)
Like a deceptive cocktail,
Lures me into a sleep.

I can't even hope in my dreams,
This world's far more twisted
Than it first seems.

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(to anyone who's not british, carol voderman is a number genius thats on a cr*ppy programme called countdown, watched by old ppl normally.)

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  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Wow, this poem deserves much more than a 5. I didn't get the title at first, but once I read through it it made much more sense. I loved your use of imagery in this piece as well, everything was explained thoroughly and effectively. Great job. =]

    5.5
    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Hey, Countdown isn't crappy, I love it! =P

    Haha, I'm totally kidding, btw.

    I liked the realism in this piece. It's not so surreal anymore, it's as if the reader is actually sitting there watching everything you describe happen.

    Excellent.

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Lol..wow!..I loved the way you penned this one!...superb!...The choice of words was great and it flowed well too...and had a strong meaning and message through out..the topic was clear!
    Well written!

    5/5

    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    This poem was well written, I have to admit.
    Although...
    It kind of restates its main topic repeatedly.
    Other than that.
    It was pretty good.
    I was hooked when you said.
    I will my heart to fail.
    That was a strong line for me.
    Well done :]
    5/5