Why i put so much drive in my poems

by Independence Forever   Feb 21, 2007


I fight for what i believe in, i use my pen to vent
but i worry that the message is not sent

if someone doesn't stand up and give their say
then we will follow the same path, a sad way

i may seem overbearing, even a little fierce
but it is the hearts of wrongdoers i wish to pierce

why all this driving, all this strength of force
i must say it all now, I'm not eternal of course

i don't want this world to be ruled lie machine made parts
where we lived by rules and schedules down to the mini marts

i want freedom of speech but i don't want only the popular to speak
know what you're saying, do your homework so the subjects not weak

look at a topic from both angles, then speak your mind
but remember always to your opponent be very kind

sometimes i fear that we are led by people who think of 9/11 post
where all the events before 9/11 are as vague as a ghost

know your history, if we do not remember it we will repeat it
but if you believe in something, fight for your say, don't quit

that is why i drive, because so much more must be said
i will never stop debating until at last i am buried and dead

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "i may seem overbearing, even a little fierce
    but it is the hearts of wrongdoers i wish to pierce"

    ^^I loved those lines right there. They held so much power and depth.

    "know your history, if we do not remember it we will repeat it
    but if you believe in something, fight for your say, don't quit"

    ^^My favourite part of the whole piece, I found those two lines to be amazing, filled with so much meaning and written so beautifully.

    I thought the flow seemed a little shaky in some places, but the message behind this piece certainly made up for that.

    I was thrown of by the fact that your I's were uncaptalized, but that's a minor detail, just me being picky.

    On the whole...I love this.

  • 17 years ago

    by winterseve28

    Huzzah! That's what it's all about.

  • 17 years ago

    by Black night

    Well written mate, i can understand totally where ur coming from.
    Keep it up
    -Black night-

  • 17 years ago

    by Amber Dawn

    Great poem...it was really good and wonderfullly done!! keep up the good work....5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    Well written great job keep it up!!!