Too Late

I love this one too, you seem so, uhh, i do not know.. but you are a great poet, i like reading your poems they are so good, keep up writing, i love your work! it's so good!!

This was descriptive, whoa. i loved how you put it all together.

5/5 David

I love this. Very dark, great ending. Sad story. I really enjoyed reading. Well I expect honest comments from you, so I'll give you the same I expect. This is what I found.

Grabbing at the ground
Heart beating faster than it should
Bruises along my arms
My face dripping with blood.

_ you rhyme the whole poem but this stanza.. why?_

My body is failing
This is easy to tell
Wont someone help me
Come and lead me from h e l l?

_just a grammer mistake won't*_

I guess that's a chance you take
When you stupidly mess with fate
Seems the only problem is
I learned my lesson to late.

_ again grammer too*_

Other than that.. babe this poem was amazing :) That last stanza hit me good. It's my favorite. Again, I enjoyed reading it. I might just add you to my favorites if I see more great work from you. You're rhyming made the poem better, made the flow go smoother, -all except that one of course- You did a great job on this.

Amazing Write

5/5

Wow! i love this poem....it was soooo deep..omg! the only word that really describes this poem is WOW!.. great job!

Wow! i loved this poem!

"My body is failing
This is easy to tell
Wont someone help me
Come and lead me from h e l l?

Shoving the self pity away
Knowing that all this pain I've been dealt
I have only myself to blame
That's why all this pain I have felt."

that was my favorite part...i dont know why but it just was...you're very talented..keep it up!