Free

by Gem   Mar 16, 2007


(For a contest, the rules are at the bottom)

A Robin Redbreast
Soaring through the cyan sky
So happy, so free

So free are the
Birds of the sky
How I wish that
One day soon, I
Will be free like them

Free to roam and
Soar the vast skies
Free to travel
Without being
Held back in a cage

I need to fly alone
And find my own path
Take a chance and
Don't look back
All the answers will be clear
If I could just learn
To break free

So free are the
Birds of the sky
How I was that
One day soon, I
Will be free as them ©

*Gem*

Start your poem with a true haiku. ( 3 lines, syllable count 5/7/5, about nature)
Start the second verse with part of your last haiku line.

The Syllable count is as follows:

Haiku (Stanza 1): 5, 7, 5
2nd and 3rd stanza: 4, 4, 4, 4, 5
4th stanza: free syllable stanza
5th stanza: repeat your second stanza.

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  • 17 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    I love this poem. Your a great writer.
    Keep writing!!
    5/5

    ~Chelsea

  • 17 years ago

    by bc

    As you know i'm reading your new poems, reason would be that I really love your poems, like i've been writing for about a year and a half, but I never had that much talent than you, i'm not saying like it's a contest or anything, i'm just saying that I want to be able to write like you, i don't write that much anymore meaning I don't go to this site that much, so I just wanted to say that for poetry, it's really not those famous poets who published their own poem book that got me writing poems mostly every day, yeah those famous people affected me with writing my first poem, but when I started to write more and more, it was that inspiration you have in each of your poems that made me write, I apologize if this comment is long, but I don't really go on this site that much so to wrap this up, I just wanted to say that those famous poets aren't the people i'd call my idol for poetry, as a young person as myself, i'm smart enough to know that you're probably my idol for poetry

    Bernadette Contreras

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Interesting piece. I like the imagery behind it. It was very good. It's not my favorite form of poetry but it's good that you reach out and expand what you do. Everyone should try something new, something out of their comfort zone. Glad you did!
    Charisma*

  • 17 years ago

    by chavii

    Wow i simply love this one.So true if only we can fly like those free birds.A beautiful thought , well written.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lu

    Gem
    Your 5th stanza is different than your 2nd stanza .... 3rd line. I know the edit button is messed up and it is most likely a typo. Just wanted to let you know before you submit it for the contest. (If you didn't already know ... lol)

    So on with the poem ... I loved it ! I saw this contest on the boards and it looked so very confusing .... but you made it look so darn easy. You have penned a beauty here and it deserves much recognition. Sure looks like a winner to me!

    I will be watching the contest and cheering from the sidelines!
    Goooo Gemmmmm

    Take care sweets
    Luanne