This Girl

by The Lonely Rose   Mar 25, 2007


The girl,
Who sits in the corner.
Who is she?
The girl that is so quiet,
So mysterious.
Why is she hiding?
Curling into a little ball into her shell,
Her shell inside herself.
What caused her to be this way?
Who knows.
She has no friends,
No one to catch her as she falls.
So if she keeps on falling,
Who will save her?
Won't she die from just falling?
Won't she die before she hits the floor,
In her own pool of blood?
Blood of her own cuts,
Blood of her own death.

Lets look at her from the inside out,
She has looks,
The shy personality,
The smarts.
Isn't that the outside?
In the outside her scars are starting to show.
Flashbacks of memories.
Scaring her more.
Hurting her from the inside out.
So what is she inside?
Just black,
Just her falling with a hand reaching out for someone that one day will catch this poor girl.
This girl,
turning into a woman,
What will become of her?
Will she die and crash before she hits the ground?
Who knows..

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  • 17 years ago

    by azii

    Nicely done!
    Wonderful poem, I loved it ..
    You have talent
    Keep it up!
    Best of wishes :)

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Wow. i like this mysterious. it was a really good poem. however, it lacked a strong structure in two parts: Just her falling with a hand reaching out for someone that one day will catch this poor girl.
    and the second to last line.

    nice poem. 4/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow, this was gorgeous, i could see the poem clearly in my mine, it was so detailed and so beatiful, the flow was perfect, i would give you a 10/5 if i could, but they only go up to 5/5
    i will definetely read more if i can.
    luv gabriella

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    In the outside her scars are starting to show.
    ^ I think it should be "on" not "in"

    THis was a very interesting poem. I liked how you used very short lines it really added effect. The poem struck me as kind of unique and I enjoyed the descriptions. I think the flow could be improved by more closly lengthed lines but it was still good. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Nicole

    5/5 this is truly a work of art u are a fabulous poet of today. this is clearly written from the heart you let the readers see from your eyes what ur going through. well done keep writing

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