Its your fault !

by amelia   Mar 27, 2007


Its 2am on the clock,
thoughts of you I cant block,
they just keep coming back
reminds me of all I lack.
Oh what a rotten life I lead
after you became the friend I need
I'm doing fine through the day
Yes... I'm faking it okay
but here as I lie in the dark
Thoughts of you seem to lark
around my head in the night
departing of everything bright
My sanity I try hard to sustain
but I'm broken down by this pain.
As you look and at me deride
I say I'm ok,but I lied.
My world turns dark and desolate
there's no one around who can relate
I'm through,so I'll succumb
and my body's become so numb
my life's coming to a grisly end..
my silver knife,my only friend..
then everything around me comes to a halt
come look at my wrist..its all your fault

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  • 18 years ago

    by Kaz

    Srsly touching ... awesome.. peom.. i feel the same way at times.. very relatable.. srsly gr8 wrk.. especially the ending was just gr8...

  • 18 years ago

    by Kate

    I love this poem..
    its really good, coz its awsoem...
    like i can feel that weird bad feeling in the back of my head when i was cloase to the end..
    its awsome.

  • 18 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I think the last 4 lines were the best they definitly portrayed deep emotion. 5/5 from me ~mel

  • 18 years ago

    by Leanne

    My life's coming to a grisly end..
    my silver knife,my only friend..
    then everything around me comes to a halt
    come look at my wrist..its all your fault

    Those 4 lines were the perfect way to end the poem, very powerful. Wondefully written and great imagery too.
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Reminds me of all O lack.
    ^ What is "O lack"?

    I say I'm ok,bit I lied.
    ^ It should be "but"

    This was good and contained a lot of emotion. I think the flow can be improved though. It is a bit edgy because of your rhyme scheme. Try and make the rhymes more smooth if you can. Other than that, the descriptions were pretty good and you used nice vocabulary. Nice job 5/5

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