An unwilling blade

by The Angel of Secrets   Apr 10, 2007


She sits on her bed, tries to shut it out,
But they won't go away, they won't stop the shout.
She puts her hand outside her ears,
But she can't shut out all the voices she hears.
"Do this, do that, cut you're wrist with that blade,
Let the blood pour, and the world will fade.
The pain, the tears, and every worry,
It will all go away, if you do it, just hurry.
If you don't do it now, you coward, we will come,
But if you do, we won't, and you'll just feel numb."
She feels a different feeling, and the tears start falling,
She wants to be saved, but the shadows keep calling.
She wants to scream, but the blade stars to slip,
The blood gets spilled, and the loses the grip.
She lays on the bed, on the blood stained sheets,
The only noise she hears are her own heart beats.
She is safe for now, and she doesn't have to fight.
The shadows, and the voices, they left, for tonight.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Confessions

    Extremely Touching..You're on my favourite poets list!<33

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow, this piece was nicely penned, it was sad and deep, my fave lines=
    "Do this, do that, cut you're wrist with that blade,
    Let the blood pour, and the world will fade.
    it was amazing 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Good one, very interesting and also unique. Well written. I liked the topic and i enjoyed in the atmosphere of the poem. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I liked this. The entire poem has a really dark feel to it. It really makes the reader want to read it and sends shivers down there spine at the same time. I liked your rhyming couplets used, they didnt seemed forced and poem had a steady flow to it. I can kinda relate to this poem. I can understand what your saying with this voice in your head. i liekd the alliteration you use with "stained sheets" this creates this really grusem imagery. To improve this peace of work, i would suggest you split it up into stanza's. I mean it'll make the work seem less clutered i guess. I also suggest yopu use a more varied punctuation. But i did quoite enjoy it. Keep it up! xx

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I could imagine myself in front of that girl, this poem is so powerful and deep. 5/5

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