Nobody's Listening

by Tricky Daze   May 12, 2007


Hearing the horrible sound of raindrops,
Hitting to the window,breaking the silence.
Being quiet will be my biggest violence;
Because nobody is listening to me.

In a room that is usually called a class,
A woman acts like we're just an idiot.
My words would absolutely be my riot;
Because nobody's listened to me.

Memories are still itching my mentally broken soul,
My superstition mind told me bad things would happen.
But nobody thought that things would be that sudden;
Because nobody had listened to me.

Still reminding that moment like it was only yesterday,
People yell 'Earthquake' like it's a goodbye to all the losers.
Didn't help people from burying to ground with structures;
Because they didn't even listen to me.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I liked your repitition idea on the last line of each stanza. It really extended your point. You had a good rhyme scheme going on hear, with the secound and third line of each stanza rhyming. I liked htis alliteration you used with; "Hearing the horrible" it introduced the reader to the poem. Enjoyable way to start. I likedt he idea of this no one's listening when they really should.. .it made me think. Good vocabulary used, and good description. Loved how you described yourself as "mentally broken soul" it was good. I thought to improve you could of used a more variety of punctuation. But a good read. Keep it up! xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Nick who Plays Pool

    I feel the same way, people don't acknowledge us and if they don't sometimes things can be bad. I wish people would listen to me and it's frustrating because they don't. Anyways this poem was nicely written and I like how you used organization

    Line
    Ryhme
    Ryhme
    Repeat Line

    You've been repeating the last line in a stanza in eachother which I find to be very nice. I like how you had a ordinary line and then you rhymed the next two. As for the rating, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by xo kisses xo

    Awe! thats so sad. i love how you repeated the last line in ever stanza. this would be a good poem if it rhymed...but its still really beautiful without rhyming. 5/5

    xo kisses xo

  • 16 years ago

    by David

    The description and effect this has on the reader is magnifico! well done and plz keep writing. love your poems. every single one of them.

    5/5 David

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