The gun

I liek the thought behind it but the rhyme scheme is to simple for me I know its readers preference but I like more meat in the lines I wanna feel the fear I want to hear the birds you know but good framework on it

The flow was good and I loved the meaning of this poem.You shouldn't press the rhyming as much though.All in all it was a pretty good poem.

<3Amber

I really couldn't get a picture from this the imagery lacked. The flow was just alright though the rhyme seemed forced in some areas. I like the meaning you portrayed behind this piece but to me this was too simple. Overall 3/5

Wow. the imagery was powerful and the whole piece was powerful. i loved every single word of it. nice one

The imagery was great...When you write you should let the rhymes come out not like forced..It was really well writen though..Good JOb

5/5