Softball

by luv Shelbz luv   Aug 4, 2007


Up to bat
Crack
running running
Thump "safe"

On 3rd
Whoosh
Steal
running sliding dust flying
"OUT"

Now in the field
Ball one
Crack
pop fly
High so high
but then
Falling falling fast
plump
the burn of the ball
In my glove leaves a mark
Out!!!

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  • 18 years ago

    by Chelsey

    It was different, I dont see many poems like it.
    But it was still good.
    yet another pom that proves you have talent.
    keep it up.
    xoxo
    --Chelsey

  • 18 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Good poem. Very unique and I love how it is different. I already knew you loved softball but I didn't think you'd write a poem about it :P. I loved the onomateopias(sound words like whoosh) in it as well.
    Great Job on this. 5/5

    -Shannon <3

  • 18 years ago

    by LiNa

    Love softball so i loved the poem love you

  • 18 years ago

    by Debbie

    Such a succinct depiction of a softball game. The use of certain sounds and actions definitely brought fair justice with this piece. Pretty.

  • 18 years ago

    by Fsams

    Unique and the flow is great and fun. The way words strung makes it a cohesive poem. 5/5 all the way

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