Nine Reasons

by Brittney   Aug 11, 2007


Counting the tears
As they roll down my cheek
one... two... three

I'm scared of losing you
Scared of betrayal
Scared of infidelity

They still continue to fall
four... five... six...
Each with their own meaning

Your the best thing that ever happened to me
You rescued me from a world of depression
You got my life back on track

seven... eight... nine
Continuing
Yet slowing

I love you
So don't be scared
I know we can make it together.

The tears have stopped
Emotions set free
I sit here and smile...
with yet another tear stained pillow case

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  • 14 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    This was a very interesting way to write.
    The emotion and depth were wonderful,
    the flow was actually really good,
    and the reader, is amazed. :]
    Good work! Keep it up.

  • 14 years ago

    by Jessica

    Your the best thing that ever happened to me
    ^ Should be "you're"

    Awh, I really liked this. I thought it was unique the way you counted the tear dropss. I also liked the way you didn't rhyme it but it still flowed well. The descriptions were good but I think they could be improved with better vocabularyy. The only suggestion I would make would be that maybe you should change the last line. I just felt it was a bit of an anticlimax. I like the bit "with yet another" but then maybe you could think of something other than "a tear stained pillow".. I donno, that was a bit bland to me. 5/5 though, good job.

  • 14 years ago

    by XXTruthSeekerXX

    Very unique poem, especially with the counting of tears. The only fix you can do is watch your spelling. Keep it up

  • 14 years ago

    by TrueLover

    Kinda sad, but a great poem! Kind of reminds me of me, if I'm understanding the poem right. About uncertainty? That's what I get from it, I'm sorry if that's wrong...Great write.

  • 14 years ago

    by JaMeS

    Very meaningful and i think everyone will read into that differently :)